20$ for a small work

my favourite line

"The French system of welfare is a complex, patchwork quilt of services"

first glaring mistake i see is that french welfare has nothing to do with cooking, cleaning, or laundry

Ok its not my work i know its bad thats why i wanna paix someone to correct it othewise i would have done it myself. Plz only give constructive answer thx

shit, you guys don't have to cite and reference the authors/articles you got your information from?

too goddamned easy

You gave all those information in an annexe i guess that you gave at the end of your work

What is the model of the French welfare state in the 21st century? The welfare state is very expensive. It is too expensive for those who want to limit the expenses without compromising the benefits. (I have no idea what shes trying to say here with the estimating nevertheless benefits so I just took a stab) However, it remains necessary to the social cohesion and to the working of the economy. Today, a new a welfare state must be formulated in order to better support more of the needy French population. Social protection in France is based on the principle of solidarity. The commitment of the social protection is declared in the first article of the French Code of Social Security. The principle is used in a number of different ways. The idea appears to refer to co-operative mutual support. Some writers apply the term in relation to “mutualist” groups (friendly societies) and makes the emphasis that people insured within national schemes (les assurés sociaux) are called to contribute and profit on an equal footing. Others stress that relationships of solidarity are based on interdependence. Solidarity is regularly understood in this context and in terms of common action to be a mutual responsibility and shared risks. The French system of welfare is a complex system of services that resembles a patchwork quilt. This kind of arrangement is incredibly expensive. Much of the focus of social policy in recent years has fallen on the control of spending called “the hole in the social” (le trou de la Sécu). The main areas of concern are not dependency of welfare system or unemployment, but pensions. Due to the special privileges accorded to particular occupational groups and spending on health care, the stress is placed on independent, market-led services (la médicine libérale) thus presenting considerable problems in cost control. It is important to notice that, the aging demographic also has an impact on the expenses by creating an increase of needs of coverage care of the old dependent-persons. All in all, since 1980, the expenses of social welfare increased from 2 % to 4 %. Criticisms are listened to denounce the financial weight of the system. (I have 0 fucking clue what that is suppose to mean, like none) Even if the cost of maintaining the social welfare is hefty, it is not unbearable. Compared to other European nations, France is not the most lavish spenders on social welfare. France spends 7870 euro on social welfare on average a year and per capita. It is situated behind Belgium (8240 euro), Austria (8380 euro), Denmark (8400 euro), the Netherlands (8770), and Sweden (8840 euro). It seems necessary to develop the French social model of protection, with the aim of increasing the efficiency and answering the new needs. Unfortunately, since the beginning of the 2000s, the government has been determined to limit the increase of social welfare expenses is visible through a “hardening” of the conditions necessary for individuals to access the social welfares. On the other hand, it seems difficult to speak about the reform of the French social welfare without speaking about the abrogation of the new law on the pensions …The minimum age of retirement in France is increased from 60 to 62 years old. The difficulty of the work is rarely taken into account; only the disabled person will be authorized to retire at 60 years old. All other workers exposed to risks which reduce their life expectancy, but have no declarable handicap, are not allowed to retire at 60 years old. Maybe, it will be necessary that the reform was accompanied with mechanisms to guide seniors and help them cope with the grims of the life? Reword in the entire last paragraph

I tried my best. Tell her one idea per sentence. If she wants to introduce a new idea, start a new sentence. Never use a colon again. Also, use simpler words that she knows how to use, not something she looked up in the dictionary that just... doesn't work there.

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