[vid]My Standup Routine - Page 2

HAhahaha

Awesome story dude

well someone's gotta critize this, man i can't even hear what you say cuz english aint my 1st language, either REDO in spanish or someone put some subtitles up there PLS!

LOL ur a pimp

u ll become famous if u do a Floofy story im convinced in that
i didnt understand all prolly coz of quallity but it was very very nice

it takes a lot of balls to perform stand up
it takes even more balls to let someone video tape it
and the most for posting on LP

Props Sir. Props. ^_^

Hilarious bro... well done!

curious, did someone really ask why you were still on that site or did you plan that part?

lol , "i do not enjoy match, as much as i enjoy not being a sex offender" ahhhah

i think its really good , tnx for sharing.......at the same time (do not take this as ranting or disrespect please, its like honest thoughts).....at the same time i think you will cap out at good and kind of hit a ceiling unless you change your approach, its hard to explain like right now your perfomance theres nothing wrong with it , its not really well polished , and its not raw unpolished like its not exactly you in my understanding yet its not a full act either....i think to break ceiling and become -able- to be amazing you have to either be completely raw (yourself) less planning / cohesion / joking lines trying to make people laugh .........or follow the other way and have a -really- well polished act which becomes amazing just because its so smooth in transitions and expressions and everything.... i trying to help......do not kill messenger....i am rabbit....

Minsk

the two girls in front of the camera definetely want your dick

i would start writing up a routine based on floofy

lol I love this. Good job, sir!

hahahaha wow

A++++

A+, really really good

wow your honestly really good man, great confidence, and the material is hilarious lol.

some things that you might want to work on is breath more and find more pauses to create more presence for yourself. at some points i thought you could find better spots to use certain emotions/feelings, like excitement-which i thought was used too much, which created some delivery issues, like for example: since for the most part all your lines were delivered in high energy, which is fine in itself, but it hurts you when you went to deliver the part where you were imitating the girl giving description of herself, which was also, very excited. some comedic value was lost since the contrast between the imitation and the rest of the speech before that was not high enough. so work on finding spots in between where you just talk normal, calm etc to essentially mix up the emotions, which will allow for different parts of your speech to be that much more powerful. so learn to accent your speech in the right places, and don't just spray the emotion of excitement just cause you can.
in a nutshell use different feelings/emotions when conveying the audience. try adding some anger in there too, its always the funniest when you get pissed at something cause anyone who gets angry at apparently "trivial" things is funny. just look at tufffish.

yugless you would really get along with my family

On October 08 2008 23:53 Day[9] wrote: http://video.google.com/videoplay?docid=-8198559878970672169&hl=en Finally uploaded~! Sorry for shit sound quality. There was only 1 recording hope you enjoy!! <333 -Sean

keep up the good work